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I have posted some pictures and facts of the characthers in the gallery. So lets start with my comics!
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| Posted: 22 Mar 2009 21:18 |
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Monday Morning. 07:51 AM.
[Hears something down stairs]Buffy:JAMES! You gonna get late again if you dont hurry!
James:Okay mom, i'm coming... Oh my god. I'm lucky that my mom knows that i'm a vampire slayer. [Walks down stairs]
James:Hey mom, whats for breakfast?
Buffy:I think its sandwich and some hot chocolate.
James:Thanks mom, i'll take the sandwich to school, i promise to go to Becky.
Buffy:Okay, say hey from me OK?
James:Okey mom!
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At school. 09:39 AM.
Becky:Have you heard from that mystic guy John?
James:John? Yeah. Why do you wonder?
Becky: 'cuase, you know about the weekend. That we gonna go to the circus.
James: Yeah, i asked him and he did not have any homework for me, so i'm free all weekend.
Becky: Good, beacuse someone guy who calles him self: Angelus. Is gonna be there.
James: Sounds cool!
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Lunch. 11:55 AM.
James: Damn! Its pancake! Bugger this! I'll skip lunch to day!
Becky: What? Panncakes are like candy.
James: No, not for me! [Takes a plate and throw it down on the floor]
Becky: Okey! You dont neet do be such a jerk![Takes her food and goes to her other friends]
James: Ahhhh! Evry freakin Monday start like this! [Goes to hes locker and takes hes backpack and goes to the cemetery]
James are not so suprised when he sees Buffy standing on hes dads grave.
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What do you think guys? Is it good or bad?
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| Posted: 23 Mar 2009 08:59 |
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so why is James so mad? It seems like it is probably more than just the pancakes, something else must be going on.
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| Posted: 23 Mar 2009 16:08 |
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Yeah, i'll tell you in the comics later on.
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| Posted: 23 Mar 2009 17:06 |
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| Posted: 23 Mar 2009 17:36 |
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Do you like it?
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| Posted: 23 Mar 2009 18:44 |
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so far though it does have some grammatical errors that need to be corrected. I think you just need to find someone to edit your stuff.
Not enough has happened yet for me to tell if I actually like it or not but you've gotten off to a good start as in you have your audience wondering why James is so mad? and where is that going to lead? Definitely ensures that I'll continue reading at least until those questions are answered.
I think it all comes down to experience, the more you write the better you get. So keep it up and lets see what happens next.
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| Posted: 23 Mar 2009 19:24 |
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OK, so you liked it so far? Thats good. I have not think of any good idea for hes madness yet, but soon. And as soon i have something it will be here!
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| Posted: 24 Mar 2009 18:06 |
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[James walkes to hes mom]
James: Hey mom. What ate you doing here? I thougt i was gonna be with Willow today.
Buffy: That i thougt to, but Giles called me.
James: Giles? Is not he your old watcher?
Buffy: Yepp, he called me 'cuase one of my greatest enimes have rised again. After 14 years.
James: Who is it? I'll kick that badass!
Buffy: I dont think so.
James: Why? Who is it?
Buffy: Is it The Master.
James: What?! But how?
[Buffy and James sees a dark person in the shadow]
Person: The same way i came to life and can live in sunlight.
Buffy: That voice! It's so familiar. Is it you William?
James: I only know one named Wiliam and we used to call him... Spike!
Spike: Yeah, it's the big bad baby!
[James runs to Spike and hugs him]
James: I have missed you so much dad!
Spike: I see you have your moms feelings.
James: Teah, but your powers.
Spike: Yeah? Show me.
James: OK!
[James transforms into a vampire]
Spike: very interesting.
[James transforms back to human]
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Buffy: Spike...
Spike: Yes Buffy?
Buffy: I know this sounds a little bit weird but, have you heard of Angel?
Spike: Angel? Yeah. He did wish too. He wished that he was a immortal human, so he is not a vamp anymore.
Buffy: Okey.
James: Wait is it something that i have missed?
Spike: How old are you James?
James: Me, oh i'm 14.
Spike: OK. Angel was Buffys boyfriend.
James: Was? What happend?
Spike: Buffy ki..
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Buffy: I killed him. He was evil, a threat to my friends and family. But he was not Angel then, he was Angelus.
James: Angelus? Becky and i was gonna go to the circus on Saturday, and some guy who gonna be there was called Angelus!
Spike: Buffy, seems like the scooby gang is gonna met again.
Buffy: Yeah, but they are not gonna help me, they gonna help James.
Spike: Okey, but why?
James: 'cuase i'm the new slayer.
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So? This time. or
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| Posted: 30 Mar 2009 21:37 |
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Cool but you may want to go into more character detail for those unfamiliar with the Buffy-verse. I mean its been awhile since I watched Buffy but I did watch a couple of seasons of the show so I'm at least familiar with the main characters.
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| Posted: 31 Mar 2009 14:50 |
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Okey, i can create in marvel. And write down somethings about them. And do you like Buffy?
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| Posted: 31 Mar 2009 15:26 |
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Like I said it's been awhile since I've seen the show but yeah I think Sarah Michelle Gellar did a really good job at playing Buffy.
I liked the tv series better than the 1980s movie version
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| Posted: 31 Mar 2009 15:32 |
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Yeah, the movie version was not that god, i think the cast from the tv show sould have been in the movie. Then it maybe was gonna be good.
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| Posted: 31 Mar 2009 18:55 |
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well you know the movie came before they even thought of making it a tv series.
That and the movie was pretty much just Buffy where as the series can add a whole gang of interesting characters.
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| Posted: 31 Mar 2009 19:21 |
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I know, but i mean if they could have done a better cast to the movie, the movie should been better.
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